My Spirit's Home (1989)

[Roger Bissell 14]

My Spirit's Home

by Roger E. Bissell

1989

Like a beacon in the night,

The sparks from your soul send out their light

And help me not to lose the sight

Of my spirit's home.

Brighter than a sunlit day,

The sparks from your soul wipe out the gray

And help me not to lose the way

Back to my spirit's home.

[Mindy Newton 0]

My Spirit's Home

by Roger E. Bissell

1989

Like a beacon in the night,

The sparks from your soul send out their light

And help me not to lose the sight

Of my spirit's home.

Brighter than a sunlit day,

The sparks from your soul wipe out the gray

And help me not to lose the way

Back to my spirit's home.

I fear that I may be crossing some line of literary etiquette in doing so, but I have a suggestion: Re-write lines 2 and 5 to say, "The sparks of you..." It gives a more regular rhythm, and I think it says about the same thing. Good-feeling poem. Its sincerety comes through, though that's a virtue of your poetry in general.

--Mindy

[Brant Gaede 192]

My Spirit's Home

by Roger E. Bissell

1989

Like a beacon in the night,

The sparks from your soul send out their light

And help me not to lose the sight

Of my spirit's home.

Brighter than a sunlit day,

The sparks from your soul wipe out the gray

And help me not to lose the way

Back to my spirit's home.

I fear that I may be crossing some line of literary etiquette in doing so, but I have a suggestion: Re-write lines 2 and 5 to say, "The sparks of you..." It gives a more regular rhythm, and I think it says about the same thing. Good-feeling poem. Its sincerety comes through, though that's a virtue of your poetry in general.

--Mindy

You sure did cross the line. You meant lines 2 and 6, not 5. However, the essence of etiquette is lies used as social lubrication. You use it for people you don't care enough for to be friends with but don't want to enemize.

--Brant